In many large cities, people have to spend hours driving in heavy traffic every day. What are the effects of this on society and the individual? What can be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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people
tend to live and work in giantic
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gigantic
cities
due to
more job opportunities and other fecilities
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facilities
high level
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high-level
universites
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universities
this
result
in most populated towns and Fix the agreement mistake
results
also
more traffic
. It is obvious every day people
come across to
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havy
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heavy
have
traffic
when they comutte
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commute
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take
track
time
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apply
such
as air
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pollution
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unequlaly
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the
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traffic
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problems
is
common in huge Correct subject-verb agreement
are
cities
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. Spending time
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noise
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the noise
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car horns
sound
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sounds
affect
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affects
on
individual's mind, Correct your spelling
an
furtheremore
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further
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can increase loungh cancers. It is obvious that Correct your spelling
pollution
time
is regarded as the worthest
wealth to Correct your spelling
worthiest
worst
people
as well as
healthy. Although
people
spend Correct article usage
a noticible
noticible
part of their days in Correct your spelling
noticeable
traffic
and this
take
their Correct subject-verb agreement
takes
time
and also
they have to wake up so early in the morning to could get their
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to their
work place
and get back too late at Correct your spelling
workplace
the
night because of Correct article usage
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traffic
, this
can distribute their sleeping time
effecting on their health.
Regarding problems which society face
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traffice
means more working Correct your spelling
traffic
car
at the same Fix the agreement mistake
cars
time
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the air
time
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making
air
too Add an article
the air
hazardeous
to breathe. Correct your spelling
hazardous
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, the rason
why Correct your spelling
reason
metropoliten
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metropolitan
cities
sufferring from mispopulatting areas is that individuals choose city center
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centers
gathered
more offices and institutes Wrong verb form
gather
due to
save commute time
and avoid getting trapped in such
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the former
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turn
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, high
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the high
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houses and accommodation in the Correct your spelling
buying
center
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centre
cities
is the consequence of demanding these neighberhood
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neighbourhoods
other area
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another area
other areas
suburbes
.
Every Correct your spelling
suburbs
suburban
problem
has some solution and in this
case
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case,
this
go
down more to governments than Change the verb form
goes
people
by regullating
some simple laws Correct your spelling
regulating
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to
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this
motivate
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motivates
people
to park outside of there
for not paying more money for it. Correct your spelling
their
Government
must find Correct article usage
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roots
of these issues to cope with Correct article usage
the roots
it
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them
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there is a lack
in
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of
the
public transportation system and the easiest way to resolve it is Correct article usage
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improving
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to improve
adding
more public transportation means like Wrong verb form
add
bus
and trains and the like.
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buses
slow moving
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slow-moving
traffic
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apply
on
of the big Correct your spelling
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cities
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cities'
city's
problem
and it may Fix the agreement mistake
problems
put
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have
of
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on
problem
and wasting Fix the agreement mistake
problems
time
, and even such
effects on society like polutions
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pollutions
pollution
populatting
not Correct your spelling
pollution
equaly
in areas. Correct your spelling
equally
However
, Correct article usage
the covernment
covernment
can deal with Correct your spelling
government
governments
this
by regullating
and adding some Correct your spelling
regulating
equipments
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types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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task response
Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and presents relevant points. However, you should strive to provide more detailed reasoning and examples to strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure of the essay is clear, and the paragraphs are organized logically. However, some transitions between ideas and paragraphs could be smoother to further enhance the flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving your language accuracy, particularly in terms of spelling, grammar, and punctuation. Small errors can accumulate and affect the clarity of your writing. Consider reviewing the correct spelling of words and usage of tenses.
task response
You have effectively addressed the issues of heavy traffic and its impacts on both individuals and society. Your inclusion of potential solutions demonstrates critical thinking.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your discussion effectively.
coherence cohesion
Despite some grammatical errors, your essay remains understandable and maintains a focus on the topic throughout. This demonstrates your ability to stay on track with your main points.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.