the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.
The provided bar charts indicate two types of TV
programmers
watched by men and women and four different age Replace the word
programs
group
in Australia. it is Fix the agreement mistake
groups
clear
seen Change the adjective
clearly
than
Correct word choice
that
the
most woman Correct article usage
apply
are
watch Unnecessary verb
apply
reality
shows than
Correct quantifier usage
more than
game
shows. In contrast
, reality
shows are not as popular as game
shows among man
. Another interesting point all groups except Fix the agreement mistake
men
more
than 45 age are more engaging Correct word choice
those older
to watch
Change preposition
in watching
reality
shows. The figures for group
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groups
more
than 45 Change preposition
of more
year
are similar Change to a plural noun
years
both
genres. Getting back to the details the percentage of Change preposition
in both
female
, who watch Fix the agreement mistake
females
reality
shows is 70%, however
, Correct article usage
the male
male s
percentage is 35%, Correct your spelling
males
in
contrast
male, who watch Add the comma(s)
contrast,
game
shows is
more Correct subject-verb agreement
are
indicator
. it is approximately 61%. The percentage of Fix the agreement mistake
indicators
female
is 60%. If we look Fix the agreement mistake
females
the
figures who watch Change preposition
at the
reality
shows from 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 ages are slightly more popular than who
watch Correct pronoun usage
those who
game
shows. ( The percentages who watch reality
shows age
from 25 to 34 and 34 to 45 are approximately 60% and 65%. Wrong verb form
aged
Similarly
situation is roughly 40%) both genres 16-24 and 45+ ages have the same indicators of approximately 50% and 70%.Add a comma
Similarly,
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