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the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.
The table provides information about the numbers of
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 and overnight stays in public and private
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 in 5 Australian
states
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 for
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 year.The pie chart demonstrates percentages of
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 and overnight stays in public and private
hospitals
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 in 5 Australian
states
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.
According to
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 the table, New South Wales had the highest number of hospital stays, both
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 and overnight, in public
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, South Australia had the lowest number in both categories. Private
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 had fewer stays in general, but still played an important role in hospital services in all
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. The pie chart shows that most hospital stays happened in public
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.
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 stays were slightly more common than overnight stays
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. Private
hospitals
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 had smaller percentages in both categories. In summary, public
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 were used more than private
hospitals
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 in all five
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, and
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 stays were more frequent than overnight ones.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words day, hospitals, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 8 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • viewership trends
  • genre
  • comparative analysis
  • distribution
  • notable deviations
  • cultural influences
  • societal factors
  • predictive trends
  • viewing preferences
  • target audience
  • popularity metrics
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