the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.
The bar chart shows the number of
people
who watched TV programmes by male and female and four different age groups in Australia.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that more women than men watch reality shows,
while
the proportion of male and female audiences
prefering
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preferring
game shows is almost similar.
Additionally
, the proportion of
peopleage
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people age
people
45+ enjoying reality and game shows is the biggest among other groups.
To begin
with ,a large majority of women almost 70% watch reality shows,
while
this
TV
program
is
also
enjoyed by 38% of men. In terms of age group, a significant proportion of
people
aged 45+ and 35-44 watch
this
program
around 70% and 68%.
This
program
is
also
watched by 60% of audiences aged 25-34 years old.
However
,other age groups
not
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are not
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really interested in
this
show.The number of
people
16-24
approximately
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is approximately
show examples
52%. In the second
chart
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chart,
show examples
the audience of women and men are almost similar around
50%and
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50 and
51%.
Furthermore
, the audience of
this
program
are
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is
show examples
popular belong
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mostly
show examples
45 years old, followed by young
people
16-24 years old around 50%.With 40%
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of
show examples
35-44 old
people
categorises
also
enjoying
with
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show examples
this
programme.
By contrast
,young
people
25-34years
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25-34 years
old have less interest.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, program with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • viewership trends
  • genre
  • comparative analysis
  • distribution
  • notable deviations
  • cultural influences
  • societal factors
  • predictive trends
  • viewing preferences
  • target audience
  • popularity metrics
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