These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past.  Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?  Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.  Write at least 250 words.

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There are many attractive
places
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around the world, so many people travel to see
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places
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and enjoy
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significant sights, and try to keep
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about
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these
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, not all the effects of
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innovation have been positive,
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, visiting different
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has brought many benefits as well. There are some drawbacks to travelling to different countries for tourism. A common criticism of travelling abroad is that travelling in groups will cause
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damage
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the environment ,
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, tourism will have
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a bad effect
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on
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wildlife
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and animals.
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, some countries started cutting trees and forests and
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them with hotels and
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skyscrapers
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build
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many restaurants and cafes
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on
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will lead to
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environment
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disastor
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disaster
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the end. Another disadvantage is that most
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attractive
atractive
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attractive
cities become a direction for tourists,
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, they
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so crowded, so it is hard for locals to live there Despite these negatives, there are some advantages as well. One
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advantage is that
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loacal
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local
economy will improve
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regarding
to big
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of tourists who are visiting
this
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city.
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, when many tourists visit a place they can improve their economy by providing jobs, and it is good for business
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,
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as restaurants, hotels, and
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taxis
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. Another positive aspect can be is that when you visit a new place
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you
will learn some language from them, and you will try to adapt to their culture and traditions. In conclusion,
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drawbacks to travelling to new
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, there are many benefits as well.
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task achievement
Ensure to provide clear and well-elaborated examples to support the points made. This adds depth to your essay and helps clarify your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Your essay needs a stronger overall structure. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea that is supported by evidence and discussions.
task achievement
The introduction sets the stage, clearly stating the topic and providing a general overview.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion succinctly summarizes the main points, providing a clear ending to the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • boost local economies
  • cultural exchange
  • mutual understanding
  • environmental degradation
  • deforestation
  • overcrowding
  • commodification
  • authentic cultural experiences
  • revenue
  • perspective
  • globalization
  • sustainable tourism
  • heritage sites
  • local customs
  • appreciation of diversity
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