The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these cause affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these cause affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
The pie chart illustrates data on the proportion of international
land
degradation from 4 different causes,
while
the table displays
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information about the percentages of
land
in three countries degraded by three causes in 1990.
Overall
, over-grazing held
at
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the top number one worldwide
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compared to others and it had
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significant damage to the
land
, especially in Oceania.
However
, the most affected region led by Europe with the highest digit. Looking at the pie chart, over-grazing stood at the highest with 35%. Deforestation fell a close
second,
30%. Over cultivation placed third place, accounting for
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more than a quarter. As for the other category, it had less than one in ten. Regarding
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regions, Europe had the highest
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total
land
degraded with 23%, mainly
due to
deforestation, 9.8%. Oceania fell a close second with a sum of 13%.
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of over-cultivation
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accounted for 11.3% of over-grazing. North America had the lowest entire share of 5%.
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