The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the change of
Correct article usage
the happy
happy valley
shopping center in 1982 and 2012. Correct your spelling
Happy Valley
Overall
, the place had a significant transformation resulted
in Correct pronoun usage
that resulted
expansion
of the establishment and rearrangement of its facilities.
Looking at the current blueprint, the outdoor lake was replaced by the furniture retail. Add an article
the expansion
an expansion
Futhermore
, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
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the paking
paking
lot was Correct your spelling
parking
contructed
Correct your spelling
constructed
at
the left side of the map adjacent to the entrance of the mall. Change preposition
on
In addition
, coffee
shop was removed to create more space between the shops. Add an article
the coffee
a coffee
New
themed restaurant was added near the food store. Correct article usage
A new
Moreover
, sport
and electronic Fix the agreement mistake
sports
store
Fix the agreement mistake
stores
placed
together just opposite the elevator. As for the Add a missing verb
are placed
entertaiment
area, it remained the same as in 1982.Correct your spelling
entertainment
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