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The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the change of
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the happy
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happy valley
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Happy Valley
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 shopping center in 1982 and 2012.
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, the place had a significant transformation
resulted
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that resulted
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 in
expansion
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the expansion
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 of the establishment and rearrangement of its facilities. Looking at the current blueprint, the outdoor lake was replaced by the furniture retail.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
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the paking
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paking
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parking
 lot was
contructed
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constructed
at
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on
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 the left side of the map adjacent to the entrance of the mall.
In addition
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coffee
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the coffee
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 shop was removed to create more space between the shops.
New
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A new
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 themed restaurant was added near the food store.
Moreover
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sport
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sports
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 and electronic
store
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stores
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placed
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are placed
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 together just opposite the elevator. As for the
entertaiment
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entertainment
 area, it remained the same as in 1982.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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