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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2915. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compar

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2915. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compar
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The following bar chart dated 1980 and 2015 shows the percentage of
women
 going into higher
education
 from 5 countries. The country with the highest
number
 of
women
 going to higher
education
 is
Australia
 with nearly 60% during the
year
 2015
whereas
 the country with the lowest
number
 of
women
 going to
education
 in 2015 was South
Korea
 with 30%. It is evident that, in the
year
 2015,
Australia
 topped the chart with the most amount of
women
alongisde
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alongside
USA
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the USA
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 with approximately 60%. Following these countries
was
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were
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UK
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the UK
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 and France with approximately 55% of
women
 getting into higher
education
. South
Korea
was remained
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remained
has remained
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 at the bottom of the list with only 30% of
women
. Even though in the
year
 2015 the
number
 of
women
 getting higher
education
 was the same in
USA
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the USA
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 and
Australia
,
USA
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the USA
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 fell short in the
year
 1980 at 38%
whereas
Australia
 started with 58%. Following
Australia
 was France with 50% of the
women
. In the
year
 1980, South
Korea
also
 started off weak with only 15% of
women
.
To conclude
,
Australia
 had the highest
number
 of
women
 going into higher
education
 in both years
while
 South
Korea
 had the lowest in both years.
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