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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2915. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compar

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2915. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compar
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The following bar chart dated 1980 and 2015 shows the percentage of
women
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 going into higher
education
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 from 5 countries. The country with the highest
number
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 of
women
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 going to higher
education
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 is
Australia
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 with nearly 60% during the
year
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 2015
whereas
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 the country with the lowest
number
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 of
women
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 going to
education
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 in 2015 was South
Korea
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 with 30%. It is evident that, in the
year
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 2015,
Australia
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 topped the chart with the most amount of
women
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alongisde
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alongside
USA
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the USA
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 with approximately 60%. Following these countries
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UK
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the UK
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 and France with approximately 55% of
women
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 getting into higher
education
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. South
Korea
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was remained
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remained
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 at the bottom of the list with only 30% of
women
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. Even though in the
year
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 2015 the
number
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 of
women
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 getting higher
education
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 was the same in
USA
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the USA
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 and
Australia
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,
USA
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the USA
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 fell short in the
year
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 1980 at 38%
whereas
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Australia
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 started with 58%. Following
Australia
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 was France with 50% of the
women
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. In the
year
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 1980, South
Korea
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also
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 started off weak with only 15% of
women
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.
To conclude
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,
Australia
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 had the highest
number
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 of
women
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 going into higher
education
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 in both years
while
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 South
Korea
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 had the lowest in both years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, education, number, australia, year, korea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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