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You recently attended a conference and would like to give feedback to the organizer. Write a letter to the organizer. In your letter: Explain what the conference was about. Describe what you enjoyed about the conference. Suggest ways to improve the conference in the future.

Dear Madam or Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well.My name is Pouria Sharifzad , I am one of the attendants of the
last
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 day programmers conference and I want to express my opinion about that event to help
it's
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 efficiency in the future . The meeting was about the new ways of programming , developing old styles of the job and introducing new programming
softwares
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software
. At
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what I really found helpful was the location and gathering space . It was easy to access by bus and subway and
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 there were a lot of parking spots for those who came by their own vehicle.In
additon
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addition
, The key point of
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 event was the presence of high-skilled and famous software developers and their speeches .
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 , The organizers gave us a brand new mobile
devices
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 as a gift which truly made me
suprised
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. As a recommendation for
the
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future conferences , I want to mention that we will need a bigger space
due to
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the rapidly
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rapidly
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 growth of members and
many
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the many
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 people who are getting interested in events like
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 . Yours sincerely, Pouria Sharifzad.

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grammar
Consider proofreading your letter for minor grammatical errors, such as missing apostrophes and inconsistent capitalization (e.g., "it's" should be "its" and "additon" should be "addition").
task achievement
You might want to elaborate on the suggestion to improve the conference by adding specific details about how a bigger space would benefit attendees or additional aspects of the event that could be enhanced.
task achievement
You provided a clear and complete response to the task requirements, including explaining the conference, describing what you enjoyed, and suggesting improvements.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-organized with a clear logical structure. Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making it easy to follow.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of your letter are appropriate and polite, in line with the expected writing tone for this type of correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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