Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be disadvantages of being self-employed?

It is true that
in
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at
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present many individuals
prefer
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prefer to
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build their own business rather than to
work
for a foreign person. I think there are several
reason
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reasons
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for
this
situation and to parallel that, there are some drawbacks too.
Work
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Working
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for a company or organisation sometimes can make our lives really difficult and
unsatisfied
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unsatisfying
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.
Firstly
, working hours have been increased
recent
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in recent
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decade
due to
provide the profit company. Employees start to consider their
work
hours and their payment and employers generally do not share their income fairly. They
work
so hard, in fact, they miss their life for employers.
For example
, they usually do not get permission from their bosses and they miss very important circumstances
to
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in
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their life.
In addition
,
work
stress
affect
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affects
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their mental and
pyhsical healt
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physical health
very
bad
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badly
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. Some research
show
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shows
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that cancer might be related to
work
stress.
Finally
, there
are
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is
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always some
risk
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risks
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to get
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of getting
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fired for any mistakes
ragrdless
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regardless
of
its
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their
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size.
While
you have been
worked
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working
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for a company
25
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for 25
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years, bosses can
be
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apply
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fire
yo
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you
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due to
some little mistakes.
On the other hand
,
build
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building
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your own business might
be
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have
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really
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a really
the really
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good impact
to
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on
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our life quality.
However
, there are always some drawbacks in good situations.
For instance
, to start a new business, they need starting capital and
this
revenue generally
contribute
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contributes
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high
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to high
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numbers. People draw loans
for
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to
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start a new
work
but it is so risky step because they might have been
failure
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failures
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.
Also
,
work
stress could
be still remain
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still remain
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or maybe could be more than compared to corporate
work
.
To sum up
, there are so many reasons for being self-employed, like working hours,
employeers
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employee
salary,
getting
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and getting
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fired.
However
, being self-employed
also
include
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includes
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some drawbacks
due to
starting capital and
risk
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the risk
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to be failure.
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on each point to fully develop your ideas and ensure they are clear and comprehensive. Expand your discussion on the disadvantages of being self-employed, providing more specific examples where possible.
coherence cohesion
Work on reducing grammatical and spelling errors to improve clarity. Also, ensure smooth transitions between points and paragraphs to help maintain the logical flow of the essay.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame the discussion well. The main points are laid out logically.
complete response
The essay provides a balanced view of the topic, discussing both reasons for self-employment and its disadvantages.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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