Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be disadvantages of being self-employed?
It is true that
in
present many individuals Change preposition
at
prefer
build their own business rather than to Add the particle
prefer to
work
for a foreign person. I think there are several reason
for Change to a plural noun
reasons
this
situation and to parallel that, there are some drawbacks too.
Work
for a company or organisation sometimes can make our lives really difficult and Wrong verb form
Working
unsatisfied
. Correct your spelling
unsatisfying
Firstly
, working hours have been increased recent
decade Change preposition
in recent
due to
provide the profit company. Employees start to consider their work
hours and their payment and employers generally do not share their income fairly. They work
so hard, in fact, they miss their life for employers. For example
, they usually do not get permission from their bosses and they miss very important circumstances to
their life. Change preposition
in
In addition
, work
stress affect
their mental and Change the verb form
affects
pyhsical healt
very Correct your spelling
physical health
bad
. Some research Change the word
badly
show
that cancer might be related to Change the verb form
shows
work
stress. Finally
, there are
always some Change the verb form
is
risk
Fix the agreement mistake
risks
to get
fired for any mistakes Change preposition
of getting
ragrdless
of Correct your spelling
regardless
its
size. Correct pronoun usage
their
While
you have been worked
for a company Wrong verb form
working
25
years, bosses can Change preposition
for 25
be
fire Unnecessary verb
apply
yo
Correct your spelling
you
due to
some little mistakes.
On the other hand
, build
your own business might Wrong verb form
building
be
Verb problem
have
really
good impact Add an article
a really
the really
to
our life quality. Change preposition
on
However
, there are always some drawbacks in good situations. For instance
, to start a new business, they need starting capital and this
revenue generally contribute
Change the verb form
contributes
high
numbers. People draw loans Change preposition
to high
for
start a new Change preposition
to
work
but it is so risky step because they might have been failure
. Fix the agreement mistake
failures
Also
, work
stress could be still remain
or maybe could be more than compared to corporate Change the verb form
still remain
work
.
To sum up
, there are so many reasons for being self-employed, like working hours, employeers
salary, Correct your spelling
employee
getting
fired. Correct word choice
and getting
However
, being self-employed also
include
some drawbacks Correct subject-verb agreement
includes
due to
starting capital and risk
to be failure.Correct article usage
the risk
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Try to elaborate more on each point to fully develop your ideas and ensure they are clear and comprehensive. Expand your discussion on the disadvantages of being self-employed, providing more specific examples where possible.
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Work on reducing grammatical and spelling errors to improve clarity. Also, ensure smooth transitions between points and paragraphs to help maintain the logical flow of the essay.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame the discussion well. The main points are laid out logically.
complete response
The essay provides a balanced view of the topic, discussing both reasons for self-employment and its disadvantages.