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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the way of producing electricity by
water
-
power
 plants.
Overall
, there are many stages, some equipment and 1 resource, which is
water
, in
this
 man-made linear process. It starts with
water
 getting into
high-level
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the high-level
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reservoir
 and finishes with
power
 stations manufacturing electricity.
Firstly
,
water
 from rivers
go
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 to
storage
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a storage
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reservoir
.
Then
, during the day,
flow
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the flow
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 of
water
 goes to
power
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the power
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 station. In that powerhouse, there are reversible turbines which create dozens of electric
power
.
This
 electricity is delivered to
generator
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the generator
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 and
then
 is sent to
power
 lines for a national grid.
Remaining
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The remaining
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water
 stays in a low-level
reservoir
.
However
, all of
this
 process happens exactly at
day
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the same
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 time. At night, it is a bit different. First of all,
intake
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the intake
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 of
high-level
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the high-level
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reservoir
 is closed at night. But the
water
that is
 in
low-level
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the low-level
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reservoir
 is sent back to reversible turbines in order to pump
water
 into riverside storage.
And the
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The
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 canal, connecting
power
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the power
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 station and high-level
reservoir
 holds a flow of
water
 during pumping.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, reservoir, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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