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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 3

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 3
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Given is a diagram
depicts
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depicting
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hydroelectric
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the hydroelectric
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 power station’s technique of generating electricity.
Overall
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, there are some stages and equipment in a man-made, linear process. The whole procedure starts with using a river to generate electricity and ends with a
low
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low-level
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level
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reservoir
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.
Firstly
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, it is apparent that the manufacturing begins with a river which leaks to a high-
level
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reservoir
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. The
reservoir
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 is closed with a dam. Intake to
this
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water
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 is open
in
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during
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 the day and
close
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closed
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in
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at
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the
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apply
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night. Afterwards, the flow of aqua is
using
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used
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 for generating hydro in the day.
Next,
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in a power
station
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station,
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 H2O passes through reversible turbines which are
using
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used
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 for
generator
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the generator
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.
It is clear that
Linking Words
 the received energy goes to power lines, after use for
national
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the national
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 grid.
A
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Water
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water
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 which is used for static discharge in a
low
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low-level
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level
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reservoir
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. Following these,
a
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apply
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water
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 in the
low
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low-level
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level
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reservoir
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 outflow backwards at night. The flow of
water
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 is
pumping
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pumped
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 into
high-
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a high-level
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level
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reservoir
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 at night. The same operation proceeds in a reverse order.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, reservoir, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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