The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart below illustrates the quantities of different kinds of crimes in British and Wales from 1970 to 2005. It's clear that the number of
street
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robbery
was always the smallest and all of those cases showed Fix the agreement mistake
robberies
an
generally increasing trend.
In 1970, 0.4 Change the article
a
million
car theft events were Use synonyms
commited
, which was double the number of house Correct your spelling
committed
burgling
. Meanwhile, Correct your spelling
burglars
street
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robbery
accounted for the lowest figure at around 0.1 Use synonyms
million
in 1970. After that, house burgling saw a significant upward trend and reached its peak at approximately 0.9 Use synonyms
million
, which was the highest at that time, followed by Use synonyms
car
stolen at 0.8 Add an article
a car
million
, which Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
rase
steadily, which was obviously higher than Correct your spelling
rose
robbery
on Use synonyms
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street
, with the figure at below 0.2 Correct article usage
the street
million
.
During the remaining years, the reported crimes Use synonyms
about
stealing cars kept going up and peaked at 1.6 Change preposition
of
million
in 1995, but Use synonyms
then
decreased quickly and Linking Words
finally
dropped to 1 Linking Words
million
in 2005. Use synonyms
In addition
, Linking Words
the
similar situation can Correct article usage
a
also
be Linking Words
obversed
Correct your spelling
observed
on
crimes Change preposition
in
about
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in
Add an article
the house
house
, which went up slightly and Fix the agreement mistake
houses
then
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fall
to about 0.5 Wrong verb form
fell
million
, which was merely higher than Use synonyms
street
Use synonyms
robbery
, which increased slowly and Use synonyms
finally
stayed at 0.4 Linking Words
million
in 2005.Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words street, robbery, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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