The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart below illustrates the quantities of different kinds of crimes in British and Wales from 1970 to 2005. It's clear that the number of
street
robbery
was always the smallest and all of those cases showed Fix the agreement mistake
robberies
an
generally increasing trend.
In 1970, 0.4 Change the article
a
million
car theft events were commited
, which was double the number of house Correct your spelling
committed
burgling
. Meanwhile, Correct your spelling
burglars
street
robbery
accounted for the lowest figure at around 0.1 million
in 1970. After that, house burgling saw a significant upward trend and reached its peak at approximately 0.9 million
, which was the highest at that time, followed by car
stolen at 0.8 Add an article
a car
million
, which also
rase
steadily, which was obviously higher than Correct your spelling
rose
robbery
on street
, with the figure at below 0.2 Correct article usage
the street
million
.
During the remaining years, the reported crimes about
stealing cars kept going up and peaked at 1.6 Change preposition
of
million
in 1995, but then
decreased quickly and finally
dropped to 1 million
in 2005. In addition
, the
similar situation can Correct article usage
a
also
be obversed
Correct your spelling
observed
on
crimes Change preposition
in
about
Change preposition
in
Add an article
the house
house
, which went up slightly and Fix the agreement mistake
houses
then
fall
to about 0.5 Wrong verb form
fell
million
, which was merely higher than street
robbery
, which increased slowly and finally
stayed at 0.4 million
in 2005.Submitted by Phigros666 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words street, robbery, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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