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The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of china and the USA between 1920 and 2000

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of china and the USA between 1920 and 2000
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The line chart gives information about the changes in the birth proportion of two countries,China and the USA, from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 both countries followed almost the same pattern in the given period. As can be seen, the two countries started at about 10 and 11, respectively in 1920.
Then
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 they witnessed a large number of swings that led to some fluctuations. The USA reached the number of 5 sharply,in 1945 and again began to grow and arrived at the highest point in the during the time. After that decreased fairly to the end of time.
According to
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 the graph, China has had the most swings till 1950.
This
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 nation experienced the highest point exactly 20. So recorded a sharp decline to approximately 9 and
then
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 continued to go down to the final point. The starting points were the same nearly, but the ending points were a lot different, the figure of 2 for China and 7 for the USA.

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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • demographics
  • population control policy
  • One-Child Policy
  • Baby Boom
  • fertility rate
  • census data
  • fluctuations
  • societal norms
  • economic prosperity
  • Great Leap Forward
  • family planning
  • contraception
  • workforce participation
  • aging population
  • urbanization
  • trend analysis
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