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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015
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The following bar chart and table eliminate the value of one country’s experts dealing with different product categories, including Petroleum
products
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, Engineered goods, Gems and jewellery, Agricultural
products
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 and Textiles .
Overall
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, both export earnings and
change
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changes
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 in
values
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, in terms which are given with
billions
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 and
percentage
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percentages
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, are elaborated between 2015 and 2016.
According to
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 the chart Petroleum
products
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 and Engineered goods
are
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were
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 merely
at
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in
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 the same range between 2015 and 2016, constituting approximately 60
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billions dollar
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billion dollars
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.
Comparing
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Compared
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 with the
name
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names
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 of
products
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 that were mentioned above Gems and jewellery
maintain
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maintained
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 in the third line, comprising 40
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billions dollar
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billion dollars
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. Agricultural
products
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 and Textiles stand in the lowest line, is nearly 30
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billions dollar
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billion dollars
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. The figures between
products
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according to
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 the percentage change in
values
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 differ entirely. In the maximum level fix Textiles, consisting
less
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of less
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 than a fifth, with rising
values
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. Engineered goods, Petroleum
products
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 and Agricultural ones save the rising
values
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, constituting 8.5℅, 3℅ and 0.81℅ in relatively. In spite of being high level, consisting of 5.18
percentage
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per cent
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, Gems and jewellery lose
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
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 value during a year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, values, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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