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The diagrams illustrate annual incomes of people residing in New York City by their ages, in thousands of dollars.

The diagrams illustrate annual incomes of people residing in New York City by their ages, in thousands of dollars.
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The provided
illusration
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illustration
 demonstrates information about
yearly
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the yearly
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 incomes of dwellers in New York City by their
ages
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in
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entire
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the entire
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 age most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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individuals get roughly between 10000 and 70000
thousand
dollars
,
at
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in
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the
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apply
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meantime only a few people have more than 150000
thousand
dollars
while
young
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the young
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 generation does not at all. Regarding
ages
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the ages
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 between 15 and 25 ,just under
two fifth
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two-fifth
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 of them
expend
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spend
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 10000-30000 ,
likewise
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likewise,
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 the same
percent
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per cent
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 of
this
 age earn between none and 10000
thousand
dollars
.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 only 6
percent
 of them can obtain about 100000 to 160000
thousand
dollars
. Considering the
ages
 of 25-40 , approximately a third of the individuals earn between 10000 and 30000,
likewise
 a just above third of them get 30000-70000
thousand
dollars
.
Noticeable
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 thing that should be mentioned
that
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is that
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 only 2
percent
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per cent
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 of elder people are able to have
income
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an income
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more
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of more
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 than 150000
thousand
dollars
. Related to
older
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the older
an older
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 generation, they
also
samely
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apply
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depict similar data regarding incomes between 10000-30000 and 30000-70000.
However
, regarding income between 70000-
100000
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100000,
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 it shows more percentage rather than left
ages
 which is just more a third. The rest of the incomes do not considerable
percent
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per cent
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 which
illustarting
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illustrating
illustration
 less than one in ten.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ages, thousand, dollars, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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