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The line graph illustrates average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services from 2001 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services from 2001 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates how much Americans spent annually on mobile and
landline
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services
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 between 2001 and 2010. It is evident that
while
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 the average yearly cost of mobile
phone
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 usage increased significantly during
this
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 period, spending on traditional
landline
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 connections saw a dramatic decline. In 2001, the typical American resident paid approximately 700
dollars
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 for
landline
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services
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,
while
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 spending only about 200
dollars
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 on cellular options.
However
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, from that year onward, the yearly cost of mobile
services
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 began to rise,
while
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 expenditure on residential
phone
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 lines started to decrease. By 2006, the average annual costs for both mobile and
landline
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services
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 had converged at around 520
dollars
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. From
this
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 point forward, Americans spent more on cellular
services
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 than on traditional
phone
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 lines. By 2010, the typical expenditure on mobile
phone
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 usage had risen to about 750
dollars
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,
while
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 spending on
landline
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services
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 dropped to its lowest level, standing at roughly 410
dollars
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words landline, services, phone, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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