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Research shows that increasing numbers of people are now living in mega-cities: cities of more than 20 million inhabitants.

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Majority
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 of
population
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the population
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are
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is
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 residing in urban areas
in
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these days .
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 there are some beneficial influences
economic
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of economic
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 and social
changing
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changes
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 of mega-cities , there are some detrimental impacts on quality of life
can
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that can
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 outweigh these advantages Mega-cities
has
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have
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 become the main destination of the
economy
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 cycle since people invest more
for
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in
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 living there .
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, people who live in rural areas
moving
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 to
the
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apply
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mega cities
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megacities
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 to study or to find
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a
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well-paid
job
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jobs
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, even though they have no
any
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apply
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idea about job
expectation
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expectations
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. It contributes
for
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to
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improvement
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the improvement
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 of
economy
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the economy
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such
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 as marketing ,
hotel
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and hotel
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 business .
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 , entrepreneurs
having
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 a great chance to expand their businesses
such
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 as opening new branches and building new facilities to
provided
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 people with their services
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,
increasing
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the increasing
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number of
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population in megapolises brings serious problems
on
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with
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quality
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the quality
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 of life .
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 as traffic jams , parking problems , expensive costs of commodities
as well as
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 it is difficult to find affordable apartments
due to
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 their high cost,
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 in order to be on time for
job
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a job
the job
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 the individual has to leave
from
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home at least an hour earlier based on the mileage. In conclusion,
growing
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the growing
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 urban population has pros and cons . I believe that it should be balanced

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task achievement
Work on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to improve readability.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your main points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a single main idea supported by relevant details.
coherence cohesion
Good attempt at structuring the essay into distinct paragraphs with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
Recognition of both the advantages and disadvantages of living in mega-cities is well-presented.
coherence cohesion
Use of transitional phrases like 'Although,' 'However,' and 'For instance' helps in guiding the reader through the arguments.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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