Research shows that increasing numbers of people are now living in mega-cities: cities of more than 20 million inhabitants.
Majority
of Correct article usage
The majority
population
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the population
are
residing in urban areas Correct subject-verb agreement
is
in
these days . Change preposition
apply
Although
there are some beneficial influences economic
and social Change preposition
of economic
changing
of mega-cities , there are some detrimental impacts on quality of life Fix the agreement mistake
changes
can
outweigh these advantages
Mega-cities Correct pronoun usage
that can
has
become the main destination of the Correct subject-verb agreement
have
economy
cycle since people invest more Replace the word
economic
for
living there . Change preposition
in
Therefore
, people who live in rural areas moving
to Wrong verb form
move
the
Correct article usage
apply
mega cities
to study or to findCorrect your spelling
megacities
Add an article
a
job
, even though they have no Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
any
idea about job Correct quantifier usage
apply
expectation
. It contributes Fix the agreement mistake
expectations
for
Change preposition
to
improvement
of Add an article
the improvement
economy
Add an article
the economy
such
as marketing , hotel
business . Correct word choice
and hotel
For instance
, entrepreneurs having
a great chance to expand their businesses Wrong verb form
have
such
as opening new branches and building new facilities to provided
people with their services
Change the form of the verb
provide
However
, increasing
Correct article usage
the increasing
number of
population in megapolises brings serious problems Correct quantifier usage
apply
on
Change preposition
with
quality
of life . Correct article usage
the quality
Such
as traffic jams , parking problems , expensive costs of commodities as well as
it is difficult to find affordable apartments due to
their high cost, For example
in order to be on time for job
the individual has to leave Add an article
a job
the job
from
home at least an hour earlier based on the mileage.
In conclusion, Change preposition
apply
growing
urban population has pros and cons . I believe that it should be balancedAdd an article
the growing
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task achievement
Work on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to improve readability.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your main points.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Good attempt at structuring the essay into distinct paragraphs with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
Recognition of both the advantages and disadvantages of living in mega-cities is well-presented.
coherence cohesion
Use of transitional phrases like 'Although,' 'However,' and 'For instance' helps in guiding the reader through the arguments.
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