The chart below shows the employment rates of the 25 to 34-year and 55 to 64-year-old population according to the highest level of education attained in two separate years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the employment rates of the 25 to 34-year and 55 to 64-year-old population

according to the highest level of education attained in two separate years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where

relevant.
The given graph illustrates the employment values of the 25 to 34
years
and 55 to 64
years
old people based
to
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the topest level of education attained in two different
years
.
Overall
, it can be seen that 2015 is higher than 2005 in every sector. Looking at the 25-34
years
data sets, It is evident that below upper secondary students got 62%
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job
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jobs
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in 2005 but it
exprienced
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experienced
little
deacres
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decrease
in 2015 amount was 57%.
Upper
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seceondary
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secondary
rate was nearly 80% and
its
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also
follow
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the
semilar
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similar
trend in 2015,
was
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about 73%.
Post secondary
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no-
teriary
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tertiary
and
teritary
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tertiary
territory
were the top
value
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values
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in
this
graph. nearly 85% in 2005 and
reamained
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remained
same at 2015, respectively. Looking at the 55-64
years
data sets,
It is clear that
below upper secondary students got 40%
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job
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jobs
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in 2005 but in 2015 it increased
at
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to
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nearly 50.
Upper
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seceondary
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secondary
is the
avarage
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average
rate in
this
graph
its
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it
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was 55 in 2005 but in 2015 it
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little
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higher about 60%.
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no-
teriary
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tertiary
and
teritary
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tertiary
was
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not higher than
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the younger
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group
it
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apply
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respectively, 60%,
61
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and 61
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% in 2005
at the end
year 2015,
amount
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the amount
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was 62% and 67.
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