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Many people nowadays fo not feel safe either when they are at home or go out. What are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

#people #fo #home
There is no denying the fact that
alot
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a lot
 of
people
feels
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 less
secured
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 all around ,both at their houses or when they move around.In
this
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i
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 will be discussing the causes behind
this
 feeling and propose solutions for it.
To begin
 with, there are many reasons why
people
 do not
to
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feel safe.
Firstly
, the wide spread of criminal levels among
people
, because of increasing numbers of
psycological
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psychological
 disorders and
wide spread
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 of
dissrupted
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disrupted
 games among youngers. In
others
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 words,
people
 with mental disorders may do things they are not aware of.
In
addition
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aggresive
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aggressive
 games tend to have bad
effect
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in
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 thoughts and behaviours.
For example
 , many criminal accidents tend to have
relation
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 with video games or patients with mental problems. In terms of proposed solutions for
people
 to feel more secure ,
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 believe that we need to raise
people
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 awareness of
self protection
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self-protection
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 methods either at home or outside.
Firstly
 at home, they can put alarms
in
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on
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 doors ,
in
addition
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 they can illustrate cameras for more protection and security, they should avoid going to
un secured
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unsecured
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 places
specialy
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especially
specially
 at night time .
Moreover
, the
goverment
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government
 should put more restrictions on weapon purchases in order to limit their spread.
For example
, in many
countries
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countries,
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 the criminal level significantly decreased after
govermental ristrictions
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governmental restrictions
 and
awairness
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awareness
campaighns
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campaigns
. In conclusion,there is no
denaying
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taht
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that
people
 feel
nowdays
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nowadays
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 less
secured
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secure
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 because of
high
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the high
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 level of
criminals
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crime
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. But there is
alot
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a lot
 of work that can be done to return back the feeling of security around.
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language
Work on improving sentence structure and avoiding run-on sentences. For example, use conjunctions and punctuation to separate ideas more clearly.
task achievement
Provide more detailed and specific examples to better illustrate your points. This will make your arguments stronger and more relatable.
coherence
Improve the coherence by better linking your paragraphs and sentences. This can be achieved by using transitional phrases and ensuring a smooth flow of ideas.
introduction/conclusion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which help to frame your essay effectively.
task achievement
You have addressed the task by discussing both the causes and solutions related to safety concerns.
logical structure
Your essay covers multiple perspectives, including psychological factors and government responsibility, providing a well-rounded analysis.

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