The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The  diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The process charts illustrate the production of
fish
pie.
Overall
, is a linear, man-made process with 2 main stages
started
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starting
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with the delivery of
potatoes
and fresh salmon and,
finished
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finishing
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with the frozen
fish
pies stored or ready to dispatch. First of all, up to one
month
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month,
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the
potatoes
has
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will be
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delivered. After
that
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that,
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the
potatoes
are cleaned, peeled, cut in slices, boiled, chilled and stored in bags until their use. After that, just under 12 hours, the fresh salmon arrive at the factory.
Subsequently
, the slices of
fish
are embedded with lemon juice and salted.
Then
the salmon is cooked in a steam oven. Following that the skin and bones are removed by hand and inspected. The
fish
is added in
a
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preparation with peas, sauce, and
the
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potatoes
that had been
storage
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stored
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before, all
this
product is mixed and wrapped and saved in the fridge and
then
storage
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stored
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or
dispatch
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dispatched
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for
consume
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consumption
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, potatoes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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