The qualities a person needs to become truly successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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time, the ethical behaviour and
skills
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renound
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renowned
personality
is
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the most necessary
thing
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things
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.
While some
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people
argue that all
this
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qualities cannot be
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adopted
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at a university or
colleges
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college
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. I disagree with the statement,
thus
this
essay will prove
that
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how
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academic institutions
play
major
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a major
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role in developing
best
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the best
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charecter
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character
of
person
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a person
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to become
sucessful
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successful
between
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crowd
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a crowd
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of
people
. To
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begin
with,
firstly
, in the
university
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the
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curriculum
of
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courses
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have
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elective
subject
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subjects
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which help in
development
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the development
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of additional
skills
needed for
completion
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the completion
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of
degree
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the degree
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.
For instance
, In
office
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administration
advance
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deploma
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diploma
course it is compulsory to opt
at
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for at
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least two optional
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to learn
skills
to
persent
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present
self
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yourself
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in
fornt
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front
of customers.
Thus
, gaining knowledge and experience about
self apearence
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appearance
and communicational
skill
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skills
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with customers
with
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perfoming
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performing
the presentation
in
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between 40 classmates teach how to manage
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flow less
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and confidence to stand on
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legs in
this
world.
Secondly
, Discussion
assignment
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assignments
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in
classroom
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the classroom
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with
teacher
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teachers
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and friends develop
peatience
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patience
and broad thinking
skills
which can be useful in the outer commercial world for solving
obstacle
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obstacles
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.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
college
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colleges
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and universities held
saminars
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seminars
with highly
effctive
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effective
and successful
people
in certain professional fields to motivate and teach youth to follow
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in there
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there
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footsteps and do
such
hard work to earn their name in
market
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the market
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.
Therefore
, learning both the practical and the
theoritical
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theoretical
knowledge at
intituions
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institutions
intuitions
in the best service they provide to become
successful
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a successful
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person in the current world. In
conslusion
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conclusion
, the essay proves that gaining knowledge
as well as
experience in skill development classes at
academic
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the academic
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institute
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institutes
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have
huge
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a huge
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inpact
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impact
in
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molding
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bright
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future
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futures
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of
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for
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young
people
.
Therefore
, I majorly disagree with the statement which denies no
skill
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skills
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are learnt at
colleges
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college
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.
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