The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates the amount of
calories
kept in different products in The USA in three different years (1970, 1990 and 2010).
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that in 1970
meat
,
eggs
and
nuts
got the highest portion of
calories
, followed by
grains
and added fat.
Although
added fat got the third-highest position in that time, in 2010 it exhibited the highest amount of
calories
, followed by
grains
and
meat
,
eggs
and
nuts
. In 1970, the lowest figure came from fruit which showed a slight increase in 1990 and kept the same pattern for 2010. On one hand,
meat
,
eggs
and
nuts
exhibited the highest percentage at 465
calories
, followed by
grains
at 430 and added fat at 410.
In addition
, in 1990
meat
,
eggs
and
nuts
demonstrated a modest decline at 455
calories
.
However
,
grains
and added fat recorded a significant increase at 575 and 460, respectively.
Consequently
, in 1990
grains
got the biggest amount of
calories
.
On the other hand
,
although
by 2010 fruit had increased its percentage, it still showed the lowest figure at 85, followed by
vegetable
Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
show examples
(
which
Correct pronoun usage
whose
show examples
percentage had decreased) at around 120 and dairy at around 255.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words calories, meat, eggs, nuts, grains with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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