It is more important to use the space in cities well than make them look beautiful. To what extent do you agree ?

Nowadays, there are 2 types of building design, we must choose between high buildings and beautiful buildings. Generally, cities are known for their high number of
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and less aesthetic. Nowadays, most of the constructions are built based on practicality rather than
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, especially in
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urban areas. Meanwhile, there are so many unique and aesthetic
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too but they are only available
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. To be honest, most of it
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built for tourist attractions and business purposes. Personally, I am certain that
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inevitable, especially for high population cities. In my opinion, it is important to use space effectively since the population of the cities increases dramatically. Personally, I am certain
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are needed for efficiency. It is difficult to create a city which has buildings with beautiful design altogether. Actually, the modern one of these
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style from my point of view.
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, it is subjective and different between people. Many might claim artistic constructions are more important for our quality of life and attract more tourists; so, it will increase the income too. It should be noted that; nowadays, good design can have high value in terms of economy; yet
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kind of thing will be pricy. In fact, most of them are mainly used for tourist attractions. In summary, I feel that
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and tall
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are needed and inevitable
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crowded areas;
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is the main point of all the aspects. Whilst art is indeed an important point, it is hard to implement and less realistic. To be honest,
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more realistic in terms of
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and
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