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The bar graph below represents the data about the clubs joined by the people of two different age groups at a leisure center. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Club preferences by age range

The bar graph below represents the data about the clubs joined by the people of two different age groups at a leisure center. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Club preferences by age range
The bar chart illustrates the clubs with leisure activities which are joined by two different
age
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 groups.
First,
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the members from the 55 to 65-year-old
years
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 old category dominated the gardening club with 55 people.
On the other hand
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, there were only 25
participants
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 for gardening coming from the
age
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 25 to 35
age
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 group.
Then
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, in the photography club, there were about 45 people from each
age
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 category with a total of 90 members. For other classes, the majority of
participants
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 were from the 25 to 35
years
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 with 60 members who joined the arts and crafts class;
nonetheless
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, only 20 people were from the
age
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 of 55 to 65.
This
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 situation had a similar trend in the cycling club as well
due to
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 having 65 cyclists from 25 to 35
years
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 group and 10
participants
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 from 55 to 65
years
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. In conclusion, the gardening class had the highest number of
participants
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 above 50
years
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 old,
while
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 for cycling and arts and crafts classes were mostly dominated by
participants
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 from the 25 to 35
age
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 group.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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