The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Export Earnings (2015 -2016)

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The bar chart illustrates the situation of different exported resources between 2015 and 2016.

First,

petroleum

was the most exported product in 2015 and 2016 which was about $60

billion

worth of

petroleum

product exported in 2015.

This

number experienced an increase of approximately 3% in 2016,

made

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them

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nearly $62 million worth

petroleum

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of petroleum

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products exported.

Moreover

, engineered goods had risen as well, they exported about $58

billion

worth of it in 2015;

nevertheless

, they rose to slightly above $60

billion

in 2016.

On the other hand

the

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gems and

jewelries

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jewelry

pieces of jewelry

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experienced a small downfall

for

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export activity in 2016

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compared to 2015,

this

decreases

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worth about 5,18%. In 2015, they exported about $42

billion

worth of gems and

jewelry

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jewellery

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;

nonetheless

, only $40 million were exported in 2016. In conclusion,

petroleum

and engineered exported products experienced an increase in 2016

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compared to 2015.

On the contrary

, the gems and

jewelry

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jewellery

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export decreased in 2016 from 2015.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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11Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

159 words

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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