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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie
chart
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 illustrates the proportion of dance
classes
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 in different places and the bar
chart
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 demonstrates the number of students in various dancing
classes
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 in Australia. It's clear that most
lessions
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lessons
sessions
 are held in private studios, compared with the least in
colleged-based
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college-based
colleges-based
 studios. For the first
chart
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, dancing
classes
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 in personal studios
takes
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 up the percentage of 48%, which is the highest and is double the proportion of school halls. Meanwhile,
turtorial
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tutorial
 in community halls and other places accounted for
a
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an
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 obviously lower percentage at 18%, followed by
lessions
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lessons
 in
colloged-based
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collaged-based
 rooms at only 10%, which is the lowest. Looking at the remaining
chart
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, we can see that 600 citizens under 11 choose to take ballet
classes
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 in Australia, which is nearly twice that for people
age
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 11-16 and is the highest.
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, the quantities of
elder
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the elder
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 group and younger group in tap
classes
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 are approximately 450 and 420 respectively. When it comes to the lasting modern dance, more than 500 residents in 11-16 attend
this
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 class, which is
significanty
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significantly
 higher than that of children under 11.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, classes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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