The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK

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The diagram demonstrates changing the structure and access to modern technology in homes in the UK. All the technologies in

this

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chart, relatively speaking have been increasing over the past few years,

although

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there are some fluctuations.

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player has been steadily rising since 1996/97.

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is one of the most used

technology

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technologies

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with

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the british

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british

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British

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, in comparison with Internet access which is the lowest used technology expanding without any downwards. And it has been starting since 1998/99.

Home

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The home

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computer has been gradually growing without any hesitations can not be said about

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mobile phone which

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with oscillations, has been enhancing since 1996/97,

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Home

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the Home

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computer.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

109 words

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The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

6.The cost of flying has decreased significantly over the last decade. This has made overseas travel much more accessible. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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