The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK

The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK
The diagram demonstrates changing the structure and access to modern technology in homes in the UK. All the technologies in
this
chart, relatively speaking have been increasing over the past few years,
although
there are some fluctuations.
CD
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player has been steadily rising since 1996/97.
And it
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is one of the most used
technology
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technologies
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with
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the british
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british
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, in comparison with Internet access which is the lowest used technology expanding without any downwards. And it has been starting since 1998/99.
Home
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computer has been gradually growing without any hesitations can not be said about
a
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mobile phone which
although
with oscillations, has been enhancing since 1996/97,
as well as
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the Home
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computer.
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