The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK
The diagram demonstrates changing the structure and access to modern technology in homes in the UK. All the technologies in
this
chart, relatively speaking have been increasing over the past few years, although
there are some fluctuations.
CD
player has been steadily rising since 1996/97. Add an article
The CD
And it
is one of the most used Correct word choice
It
technology
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technologies
with
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by
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the british
british
, in comparison with Internet access which is the lowest used technology expanding without any downwards. And it has been starting since 1998/99.
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British
Home
computer has been gradually growing without any hesitations can not be said about Add an article
The home
a
mobile phone which Correct article usage
the
although
with oscillations, has been enhancing since 1996/97, as well as
Home
computer.Correct article usage
the Home
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