The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK

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The diagram demonstrates changing the structure and access to modern technology in homes in the UK. All the technologies in

this

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chart, relatively speaking have been increasing over the past few years,

although

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there are some fluctuations.

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player has been steadily rising since 1996/97.

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is one of the most used

technology

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technologies

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with

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the british

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british

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, in comparison with Internet access which is the lowest used technology expanding without any downwards. And it has been starting since 1998/99.

Home

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The home

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computer has been gradually growing without any hesitations can not be said about

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mobile phone which

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with oscillations, has been enhancing since 1996/97,

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Home

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computer.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

109 words

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The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK

In most countries, prison is an effective solution to the problem of crime. Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide education for those who violate the law. To what extent do you agree or disagree

SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT CARS ARE THE BEST WAY TO TRAVEL IN A CITY WHILE OTHERS THINK THAT BICYCLES ARE BETTER. DISCUSS BOTH POINTS OF VIEW AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

Friendships that take place online are not as meaningful as those where people meet each other face to face.

Due to the advances in science, it is now possible for people to live 100 old or even longer. While some people think it is a good thing, others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people believe that in a city, the best way to travel is by car, while other people argue that bicycles are a better way of travelling in a city. Discuss both views and give your opinion.