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he graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK

he graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK
#patterns #access #technology #homes #uk
The graph represents information about how changed patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK over the
last
 ten years.
In the
Change preposition
The
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 graph describes
four
Correct article usage
the four
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 main technologies :
CD
Correct article usage
the CD
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 player, mobile phone, home computer and internet access, which
are
Verb problem
have
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 gradually increased in
this
years
Fix the agreement mistake
year
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the most popular
cd
Correct your spelling
CD
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 payer
is
Verb problem
has
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 gradually
rise
Wrong verb form
rose
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 beginning of the
period
 and
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
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 80
percentage
Replace the word
per cent
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. the least popular internet access
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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also
 significantly
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 in
a
Correct article usage
the
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period
 from 1998 to 2002. The mobile phone
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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fluctuated wildly, accurate
beginning
Correct article usage
the beginning
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 of
this
period
less
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at less
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 than 20%, middle of
this
period
more
Change preposition
at more
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 than 40% , end of
this
period
more
Change preposition
at more
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 than 60%.
in
Capitalize word
In
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this
period
 home
computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
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also
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 from 25 to 48%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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