The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

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The charts below illustrate the number of people

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spent on different commodities and

service

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, particularly in European countries from 1958 to 2008.

Overall

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, it can be seen that

sales

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in 1958 were highest for

food

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while

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the lowest for housing.

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, in

sales

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in 2008 was the biggest housing, Meanwhile, the lowest was the

food

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. On the one hand, Looking at the pie in detail,

Sales

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in 1958 started the highest

that

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food

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was at 32 per

cent

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, followed by housing at 22 per

cent

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then

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clothing at 18 per

cent

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On the other hand

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, the lowest data were entertainment, travel/transport and luxury goods range thirteen-seven.

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, Regarding the pie chart

sales

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in 2008, housing was the biggest at 32 per

cent

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, followed by luxury goods and travel/transport remained the same at 17 per

cent

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In contrast

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, the lowest were clothing,

food

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and entertainment just under thirteen per

cent

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, food, cent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

154 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

proportion
expenditure
commodities
services
necessities
luxury goods
trends
significant changes
expenditure
housing and utilities
summarize
highlight
primary trends
fifty-year period
economic growth
technological advancements
societal values
analyze
observe

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