The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
The charts below illustrate the number of people
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spent on different commodities and
service
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services
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, particularly in European countries from 1958 to 2008.
Overall
, it can be seen that
sales
in 1958 were highest for
food
while
the lowest for housing.
In addition
, in
sales
in 2008 was the biggest housing, Meanwhile, the lowest was the
food
. On the one hand, Looking at the pie in detail,
Sales
in 1958 started the highest
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food
was at 32 per
cent
, followed by housing at 22 per
cent
,
then
clothing at 18 per
cent
.
On the other hand
, the lowest data were entertainment, travel/transport and luxury goods range thirteen-seven.
On the other hand
, Regarding the pie chart
sales
in 2008, housing was the biggest at 32 per
cent
, followed by luxury goods and travel/transport remained the same at 17 per
cent
.
In contrast
, the lowest were clothing,
food
and entertainment just under thirteen per
cent
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, food, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • commodities
  • services
  • necessities
  • luxury goods
  • trends
  • significant changes
  • expenditure
  • housing and utilities
  • summarize
  • highlight
  • primary trends
  • fifty-year period
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • analyze
  • observe
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