The charts below show the percentages of male and female students of different age groups who studied in Australia for full-time and part-time training in 2006.
The two bar charts illustrate the ratio of male and female students of different age groups who studied for full-time and part-time training in Australia during 2006.
Overall
, it is clear that
the two genders from 20 years
to 24 years
had a
highest point in Change the article
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part-time training.
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According to
what was shown, from 15 to 19 years
, the female
students was slightly increasing than male students in both Correct quantifier usage
number of female
training
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part-time by 5% and Correct article usage
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a
full-time by 1%. What is more, the percentage of females in both training between 25 to 29 Correct article usage
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years
had the same level by
about 8%, Change preposition
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while
the ratio of males in
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full-time was Correct article usage
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less than Change the article
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about 2%.Change preposition
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