The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature. and make the comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature. and make the comparison where relevant.
This
report derives from the listed flaw chart which enumerates the traditional way of black
tea
production and the modern one. A glance at the chart reveals that the procedure of each technique embraces 5 steps, commencing with compiling
tea
leaves and terminating with collecting good leave samples through desiccation.
This
is achieved by evaporating, rolling, or cutting leaves, the endowment of wholesome minerals, and air drying. As far as the initial
stage
is concerned it starts with gathering
tea
, explicitly, buds and leaves by hand from the plantation followed by putting moisture out at 60% via an electric fan. The third
stage
hinges on the method of making
tea
leaves processed. The traditional way encompasses a rolling procedure in which enzymes have gone from the leaves
while
the modern means cover small and swift cutting of a big rack onto tiny granular pieces. In stark contrast to the 4th
stage
, when prior leave racks
undergo
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oxidation and fermentation that supply enzymes and air, in the sense of alteration of leaves a copper
color
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colour
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.
Last
but not least, the 5th
stage
depicts the process in which manufactured titles of
tea
need to be dried through hot air
such
as a bonfire
either
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or
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oven, losing 97% of moisture to turn into
flavor
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flavour
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and aroma leaves.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • withering
  • moisture content
  • pliable
  • rolling
  • twists
  • breaks up the cells
  • releasing enzymes
  • machine cutting
  • fermentation
  • oxidation
  • heating
  • drying and packaging
  • machinery
  • efficient
  • traditional methods
  • modern methods
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