Task 2: The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is claimed that
science
plays a vital role in enhancing the quality of personal lives. Use synonyms
This
idea is completely agreed Linking Words
and
will be convinced in Change preposition
upon and
this
essay.
First of all, obviously, the most crucial goal of every learning effort is making the way of life easier. Linking Words
Therefore
, there are plenty Linking Words
scientific
projects and applications related to modernization and convenience Change preposition
of scientific
have
been increasingly researched in multiple ways. Correct pronoun usage
that have
For instance
, ergonomics which Linking Words
strictly
related to Add a missing verb
is strictly
science
was variously adopted in production industries in order to produce ultimate furniture for use. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the number of technological equipment which we Linking Words
are using
every single day has been invented Wrong verb form
use
as a result
of the advancements Linking Words
of
Change preposition
in
science
, Use synonyms
thus
, daily activities are Linking Words
being
more flexible and Verb problem
becoming
people
are freed up. Specifically, Use synonyms
people
do almost Use synonyms
household
chores by hand, Correct determiner usage
all household
however
, smart home devices will replace them to do these tasks.
Linking Words
On the other hand
, scientific development has constantly led to remarkable Linking Words
improvement
in healthcare. Practically, medical research and breakthroughs have created more opportunities Fix the agreement mistake
improvements
in
the discovery of curing Change preposition
for
disease
, treatment methods, and medical tools that improve the Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
overall
Linking Words
well – being
of individuals. Correct your spelling
well–being
For example
, some dangerous diseases caused by viruses and bacteria are being cured in a better way through the invention of vaccines and modern therapies that are based on prevention and diagnosis. Linking Words
Furthermore
, Linking Words
people
nowadays are able to live longer than they used to and have various ways of caring for health thanks to massive upgrading of healthcare services. Use synonyms
Consequently
, Linking Words
people
are more flexible, they not only can take health examinations online, but Use synonyms
also
search for information.
In conclusion, if Linking Words
science
wasn’t significantly improved, Use synonyms
human’s
Change noun form
human
live
couldn’t be more comfortable than it Replace the word
life
being
. The more advancement of Change the form of the verb
is
science
, the more benefits Use synonyms
people
will Use synonyms
be received
.Wrong verb form
receive
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Coherence and Cohesion
Improve coherence by ensuring each paragraph develops one main idea that supports your stance.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include more transitional phrases to link ideas clearly across paragraphs.
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Support arguments with more specific examples or data to strengthen the response.
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Check for minor grammatical errors to enhance clarity and accuracy, though they don't significantly impact scores.
Task Achievement
The introduction clearly states your position, making your stance clear from the start.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points, reinforcing the essay's position.
Task Achievement
The essay includes relevant examples that enhance the points made, showing good understanding of the topic.
Your opinion
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