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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The bar chart shows the comparison of three pineapple-producing states sellings in 2009 and 2019,
while
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 the pie chart illustrates expenses that created the retail
cost
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 of pineapple in 2019.
Overall
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, the most notable change was recorded in
country
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 A,
while
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country
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 C showed insignificant improvement over a decade. It can
also
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 be seen that distribution and retail took the lion's share of the final
cost
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. The biggest supplier of
pineapples
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 in 2009 was
country
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 B, reaching more than 4 million metric tonnes of
pineapples
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 exported,
whereas
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country
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 A and
country
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 B did not estimate 2 million altogether. The situation changed drastically in 2019, the government of
country
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 A decided to increase the provision of
pineapples
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, at the same time, the previous leader decided to,
conversely
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 to
country
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 A, diminish the amount of exports.
Country
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 C , in fact, contributed to the supplies inessentially, and both years had less than 500.000 tons of export. The
cost
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 for customers of pineapple in 2019 mostly consisted of distribution and retail costs, 35% to be exact.
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profit and taxes were followed by percentage spending, 18% and 16% respectively. In order to get import licences and international transport for
pineapples
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, countries allocate roughly one-fifth of the
cost
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.
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, the smallest percentages are spent on the production and export of goods.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, country, pineapples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • world pineapple exports
  • top three producing countries
  • 2009
  • 2019
  • breakdown
  • cost to the consumer
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
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