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Nowadays some of the drivers do not follow the laws while driving. what is the reason for that, what can be solution

#drivers #laws #reason
Nowadays some
of
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the
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drivers
 do not follow the laws
while
 driving. The main reason for
that is
 that they do not know driving
rules
 properly, the way to tackle
this
 problem is to complicate getting driving licenses. Not all
the
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drivers
 obey the
rules
 and the reason for
that is
lack
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 of
knowledge
 about driving laws.
Although
 many people have driving licenses it still does not mean that they are good at driving. There
many
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 different laws that must be applied by
drivers
while
 driving, some of them are very simple and obvious, but some are not. It may be difficult to remember, understand and obey these
rules
due to
 the lack of awareness and practice and weak
knowledge
 and skills in driving. And again they have driving licenses, the way to get
driving
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a driving
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license
 is to pass
driving
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 exam successfully. It is
also
 obvious that by examining
drivers
, objective marks both about their
knowledge
 and skills cannot be given. As
this
test
 does not demonstrate their
knowledge
 and the reason is that tests do not cover all
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 the
rules
, there are not that many questions there.
For example
, in Azerbaijan to get driving
license
 you must be 18 and older to have access to the
test
stage
. The
test
stage
 itself consists of 10 questions. These 10 questions are not enough to
test
 their
knowledge
. After that
stage
, if
person
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 passes, he or she gets to
the
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another
stage
 on which they are tested practically. But
while
 taking
driving
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test
 they do not face all possible obstacles and problems that may appear
while
 driving, so again some kind of nonsense appears here. There
many
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 different ways to solve
this
 issue,
one
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 of them is to
complicit
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getting
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driving
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license
. If
exam
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 program and scale that must be reached for getting
driving
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license
 will change, it will show positive results. Not all people should have driving
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introduction conclusion present
The essay lacks a clear introductory paragraph and a proper conclusion. Aim to structure your essay with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
logical structure
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. For example, use linking words and phrases to connect ideas more effectively.
complete response
Expand on your points with more detailed explanations. This will help in providing a more comprehensive response.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ensure that your main ideas are more clearly presented and that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. This will help in making your response clearer and more cohesive.
relevant specific examples
Good use of relevant and specific examples, such as the process of getting a driving license in Azerbaijan.
supported main points
You've identified a key issue (lack of knowledge about driving rules) and provided a plausible solution (making it harder to obtain a driving license).

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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