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The bar chart below shows th at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows th at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
#bar #three #universities #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The information about international
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student
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students
enrolments
 in three universities namely Smithtown
university
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University
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,
university
 of
riverview
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Riverview
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 and Earlwood
university
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University
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 in
India
 , Nepal , Vietnam , Indonesia and
Colombia
 .
Overall
, International student
enrolments
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enrolment
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number
 in
India
 is the highest
number
at
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of
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three
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the three
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 universities
one
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on
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 the other hand
Colombia
is
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has
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 the lowest figure.
University
 of
riverview
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Riverview
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 is the most popular
university
 in all five countries in
India
 the
number
 of
students
 is almost 7500
while
 in Indonesia and
Colombia
 is almost
same
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the same
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by1500
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1,500
students
. Smithtown
university
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University
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 had
least
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the least
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 population in all nations except for
India
 . International student
enrolments
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enrolment
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number
 in Nepal is 4000 followed by Vietnam with 2000
then
 Indonisa
by
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with
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 1000
students
 and the
last
 place
is
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in
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Colombia
by
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with
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 approximately 500 e international student
enrolments
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, enrolments, university, india, colombia, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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