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Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotic and as a result people garvitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

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commercial world, marketing becomes a crucial tool to
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 success in business which
lead
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,
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to
 big budgets
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 set by
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large
business
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businesses
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 in order to promote their
products
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influence
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to
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the consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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 for unnecessary buying, which may as result
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 consumption and expenses. There are
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few
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 steps that can be taken in order to encourage to buy local
products
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 as effective ads and better communication.
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the selling tactics from
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sellers
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 can cause
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cosumption
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consumption
which
sometime
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sometimes
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 might not needed.
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, companies
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 as Walmart, Costco,
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frills
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 promote their
products
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 with low prices which attracts to
consumer
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 stock up
those
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 goods even though they do not really need them. If they can not consume those items in time they might expire and become waste.It has
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directy
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direct
 bad impact on
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 pocket as well.
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, there are few ways to encourage to purchase
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goods from local
sellers
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. First
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,
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 small
sellers
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does
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 not
have
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have big budgets for marketing,
instead
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 of promoting the product's features if they advert more low prices
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 it would attract more
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consumer
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consumers
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 from
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- class. Moving
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, being a small producer it is quite easy to gather feedback from
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consumer
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consumers
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.
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, small
business
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businesses
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 can communicate more effectively with
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consumer
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consumers
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 which can lead to
improve
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 the sectors which are mostly suggested by customers,
it
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result
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as
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standard
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the standard
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 of service
would be
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 increased which can help to boost the sales of the
products
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, big
budgets
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 techniques can lead to more consumption as
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consumer
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consumers
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 stock up
the
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 goods which are promoted on sales which
lead
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leads
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 to might waste of
product
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products
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as
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if they do not consume on time and it expires.
however
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, small
sellers
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 should try to use effective tactics in order to promote their
products
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 and
also
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improvement on
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 customer
services
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service
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task completion
The essay attempts to address both parts of the task: identifying problems caused by large businesses' marketing and suggesting solutions to encourage buying local products.
introduction
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solutions
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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  • environmental degradation
  • entrepreneurship
  • awareness campaigns
  • tax rebates
  • sustainable practices
  • local fairs
  • economic concentration
  • collaboration
  • local economy
  • environmental impact
  • innovation
  • job creation
  • mass-marketed goods
  • cultural identity
  • incentives
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