Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotic and as a result people garvitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In the context of
Add an article
the

The noun phrase commercial world seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
commercial world, marketing becomes a crucial tool to
get
Verb problem
achieve

There may be a verb use issue here.

show examples
success in business which
lead
Correct subject-verb agreement
leads

It seems that the verb lead does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

show examples
,
nowadys
Correct your spelling
to

If you don’t want nowadys to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

big budgets
are
Wrong verb form
being

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb are. Consider changing it.

show examples
set by
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples
large
business
Fix the agreement mistake
businesses

It seems that business may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
in order to promote their
products
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

.
This
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

action
influence
Correct subject-verb agreement
influences

It seems that the verb influence does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

show examples
to
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
Use synonyms
Add an article
the consumer
a consumer
show examples
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

consumer
Fix the agreement mistake
consumers

It seems that consumer may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
for unnecessary buying, which may as result
over
Change preposition
in

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
consumption and expenses. There are
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

few
Correct article usage
a few

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples
steps that can be taken in order to encourage to buy local
products
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

as effective ads and better communication.
First,
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

the selling tactics from
big -size
Correct your spelling
big-size

The word big -size seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

show examples
sellers
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

can cause
such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

cosumption
Correct your spelling
consumption

If you don’t want cosumption to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

which
sometime
Fix the agreement mistake
sometimes

It seems that sometime may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
might not needed.
For instance
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, companies
such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

as Walmart, Costco,
No
Correct word choice
and No

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

show examples
frills
Capitalize word
Frills

The word frills should be capitalized in this context.

show examples
promote their
products
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

with low prices which attracts to
consumer
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

stock up
those
Change preposition
on those

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
goods even though they do not really need them. If they can not consume those items in time they might expire and become waste.It has
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

Correct article usage
a directy
show examples
directy
Correct your spelling
direct

If you don’t want directy to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

bad impact on
consumer
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

pocket as well.
however
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, there are few ways to encourage to purchase
Change preposition
of

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
goods from local
sellers
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. First
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

show examples
,
although
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

small
sellers
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

does
Change the verb form
do

The singular verb does does not appear to agree with the plural subject sellers. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

show examples
not
have
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb have appears to be unnecessary here.

show examples
have big budgets for marketing,
instead
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

of promoting the product's features if they advert more low prices
then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

it would attract more
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

consumer
Fix the agreement mistake
consumers

It seems that consumer may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
from
middle
Correct article usage
the middle

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples
- class. Moving
further
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, being a small producer it is quite easy to gather feedback from
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

consumer
Fix the agreement mistake
consumers

It seems that consumer may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
.
For example
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, small
business
Fix the agreement mistake
businesses

It seems that business may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
can communicate more effectively with
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

consumer
Fix the agreement mistake
consumers

It seems that consumer may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
which can lead to
improve
Change the verb form
improving

The verb improve may be in the wrong form after the preposition to. Consider changing it to the gerund form.

show examples
the sectors which are mostly suggested by customers,
it
Correct pronoun usage
This

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

show examples
result
Change the verb form
results

It appears that the subject pronoun it and the verb result are not in agreement. Consider changing the verb.

show examples
as
Change preposition
in

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
standard
Add an article
the standard
a standard

The noun phrase standard seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
of service
would be
Wrong verb form
being

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb would be. Consider changing it.

show examples
increased which can help to boost the sales of the
products
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

.
To sum up
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, big
budgets
Change the noun form
budget

Your sentence appears to use the incorrect form of budgets. Consider changing it to singular.

show examples
techniques can lead to more consumption as
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

consumer
Fix the agreement mistake
consumers

It seems that consumer may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
stock up
the
Change preposition
on the

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
goods which are promoted on sales which
lead
Correct subject-verb agreement
leads

It seems that the verb lead does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

show examples
to might waste of
product
Fix the agreement mistake
products

It seems that product may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
as
Correct word choice
apply

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

show examples
if they do not consume on time and it expires.
however
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, small
sellers
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

should try to use effective tactics in order to promote their
products
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

improvement on
Replace the word
improve

The word improvement on doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

show examples
customer
services
Fix the agreement mistake
service

It seems that services may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
.
Submitted by amarbatth367 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

grammar
Make sure to carefully proofread your essay to correct small inaccuracies, such as spelling and grammatical errors, to improve clarity and professionalism.
logic
Enhance the logical flow of your essay by organizing your ideas more effectively. Use more transition words and phrases to connect ideas between and within paragraphs.
development
Expand your main points with more specific and detailed examples to provide stronger support for your arguments. This can make your essay more convincing and comprehensive.
task completion
The essay attempts to address both parts of the task: identifying problems caused by large businesses' marketing and suggesting solutions to encourage buying local products.
introduction
The introduction presents the topic clearly and sets the stage for the discussion.
solutions
There is an effort to provide solutions to the identified problems, demonstrating an understanding of different aspects of the issue.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • homogenization
  • economic imbalances
  • cultural heritage
  • environmental degradation
  • entrepreneurship
  • awareness campaigns
  • tax rebates
  • sustainable practices
  • local fairs
  • economic concentration
  • collaboration
  • local economy
  • environmental impact
  • innovation
  • job creation
  • mass-marketed goods
  • cultural identity
  • incentives
  • NGOs (Non-Governmental Organizations)
What to do next:
Look at other essays: