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ELast week, you lost your luggage while traveling on holiday. Luckily, you have travel insurance. Write letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter: - Describe the characteristics of what you lost - Explain how you lost it - Tell the insurance company what you need from them

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Respected sir or madam, I would like to inform you that I lost my luggage
last
 week
,
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while
 travelling to Mumbai. It was a new suitcase with a red colour. That was
a
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 latest model and
which
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belongs to Pigeon company which contains valuable items
such
 as
laptop
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laptops
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,
golds
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gold
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 and clothes. I lost items of around ₹1,00,000rupees . Once
flight
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the flight
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 arrived
in
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at
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destination
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the destination
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, I went to
washroom
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 after that I walked to
baggage
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the baggage
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 section. I could not find my luggage there.
Due to
this
reason
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reason,
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 I could not enjoy my trip . Really I
disappointed
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 .
This
 was
first
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 incident
occurred
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that occurred
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 in my life. I reported
this
 to
complaint
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 desk and found the contact number of
a
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 person who
taken
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had taken
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 my luggage but
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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 I could not
connect
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contact
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 him. I need your help
for
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 claim my insurance. I have travel insurance so I need to claim my insurance amount. Hope You can understand my current situation. I have photos of my bag. If it is necessary I can send it to your mail ID. I require
full
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the full
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 amount which I mentioned above. Yours faithfully Saniya Sunny
Submitted by saniyasaniya4628 on

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coherence and cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of your experience. For example, one paragraph should be about describing the lost luggage, another about how you lost it, and the last about your request.
task achievement
Make sure to provide a clear and complete explanation of the event, specifying if there were any immediate actions taken like contacting airport authorities or checking nearby areas thoroughly.
suitable writing tone
Avoid minor grammatical errors such as unnecessary commas or awkward phrasing. For instance, 'due to this reason' can be simplified to 'as a result.'
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for a formal letter to an insurance company.
task achievement
The letter covers all necessary information: the description of the lost luggage, an explanation of how it was lost, and a clear request for assistance.
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