The chart shows the percentage of full-time undergraduate students at universities in three cities by subject area. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the most important features and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of full-time undergraduate students at universities in three cities by subject area. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the most important features and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph presents a comparative analysis of exercise
participation
rates
among Australian
males
and
females
across six
age
groups
in 2010.
Overall
,
females
exhibited higher exercise
rates
than
males
, with the 45-54
age
group demonstrating the highest percentage at 53.3%.
Conversely
,
males
recorded their lowest
participation
rates
in the 35-44
age
group at 39.5%. Male
participation
exceeded 40% in all
age
groups
except for 35-44. The youngest
age
group, 18-24, had the highest male
participation
rate at 52.8%, surpassing the lowest rate by 13.3%. Among
females
, the 35-44, 45-54, and 55-64
age
groups
exhibited comparable
participation
rates
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53%. The remaining
age
groups
displayed slightly lower
rates
, averaging approximately 47%. Despite these variations,
males
consistently outperformed
females
in exercise
participation
across all
age
groups
, with exceptions in the youngest and oldest
age
groups
where the gender disparity was less pronounced.
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