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The table below shows the average income and divorce rates of different sized families living in England in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the average income and divorce rates of different sized families living in England in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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the percentage of marriage dissolution
rate
 in Finland and Sweden from 2011 to 2015.
Overall
, the highest
rate
 of divorce
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contributed to Swedish partners in 2012.
Conversely
, couples in Finland contributed to the lowest breakup
rate
 throughout the same period. Focusing on divorce rates in Sweden,
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 at over 40% in 2011, and
then
 reached
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 peak at just below 50% in 2012.
Following
this
, it experienced a gradual decline to
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 similar
rate
 to 2014, before
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reducing
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 to about 35% in 2015. Turning to the separation
rate
 of Finnish partners, it exhibited the lowest
rate
 in 2012, after beginning at roughly 37% in 2011.
Next,
there was a significant increase in the percentage of marriage dissolution
rate
 from 2012 to 2014, and
then
 the
rate
 remained constant at just above 40% in 2015. Despite
this
, the divorce
rate
 in Sweden exceeded the
rate
 in Finland throughout all periods, with the exception of the year 2015.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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