The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
lslip's
develpoment
Now all things Correct your spelling
development
Add a missing verb
are changinges
changinges
quickly,Correct your spelling
changing
changes
for example
Linking Words
：
business develop quickly，Remove the colon
apply
environment
become more and more Correct article usage
the environment
comfutable
...Let's have a look Correct your spelling
comfortable
for
a small Change preposition
at
town
's plans Use synonyms
ofr
its development Correct your spelling
for
in
the map.
The first,Change preposition
on
the
small Add a missing verb
is the
town
called Islip.Islip Use synonyms
town
centre now only Use synonyms
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
a
countryside on the top Correct article usage
apply
in
the map.The Main Change preposition
of
road
is Use synonyms
bottom
of Correct article usage
the bottom
countryside
,two Add an article
the countryside
shop
Change to a plural noun
shops
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
on
the south and north of the Main Change preposition
in
road
,the Main Use synonyms
road
is between Use synonyms
at
Change preposition
apply
Linking Words
this
two shops.Walk on the Main Correct determiner usage
these
road
on your right,you will see a corner and go down for a walk you can see a Use synonyms
park
Use synonyms
overthere
.Walk on the Main Correct your spelling
over there
road
on your left,you will see a corner and go down for a walk,if you see a corner either,go right you will Use synonyms
seee
the school.The housing is between Correct your spelling
see
at
the Change preposition
apply
park
and Use synonyms
school
.
The second,Correct article usage
the school
the
planned Add a missing verb
is the
develpoment
.There was a bus station,Correct your spelling
development
shopping
centre Add an article
the shopping
a shopping
is
next to the bus station,Wrong verb form
was
car
Add an article
the car
a car
park
Use synonyms
is
next to the shopping centre.On the car Wrong verb form
was
park
's Use synonyms
north east
is the new house.Shops Correct your spelling
northeast
is
bottom of the car Change the verb form
are
park
.On the shops Use synonyms
south west
is the housing,new housing is Add a hyphen
south-west
besied
to the housing.On the new housing right is the Correct your spelling
beside
park
.On new housing,if you Use synonyms
across
the Dual carriageway you will see the housing.The school is near Correct your spelling
cross
by
the housing.
Change preposition
apply
Finally
,I think after alter.The Islip Linking Words
town
has a big alterationUse synonyms
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