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The table below show daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below show daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented
table
 data on
oil
 manufacturing in four nations from 2000 to 2004.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of
table
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the table
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 among
of
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all countries in
Congo
 was the biggest
productions
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production
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 of
oil
,
however
 in the end of
table
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Nigeria
 was
on
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in
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 first place
of
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in
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manufacture
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the manufacture
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 of
oil
. In accordance with
table
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the table
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 in 2000 the biggest
produstor
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production
producer
 of
oil
 was
Congo
 with 275,000
liters
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litres
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 of
oil
,
then
 goes
Nigeria
 with 205,000
liters
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litres
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.
Besides
, the penultimate place took
Somalia
 with 5,000
liters
 and the least
in
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this
 year was
Chad
 which did not
produced
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produce
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 any
oil
.
Moreover
, in 2001 the places for
oil
 production were the same, but
number
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a number
the number
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 of
producted
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produced
oil
 changed in
Congo
fallled
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to 234,000, in
Nigeria
 reduced to 201,000, in
Somalia
rised
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it rose
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 to 8,000 and in
Chad
 was identical.
Furthermore
, in 2003 were significant changes in number of production of
oil
, but
places
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the places
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 were similar to previous, in
Congo
 dramatically decreased to 215,000, in
Nigeria
 was increased to 210,000, in
Somalia
 was shot up to 21,000 and in
Chad
 started producing
oil
 and soar to 8,000.
Nevertheless
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 in
2004
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2004,
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 there were
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 changes and in
first
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the first
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 place
of
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in
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producing
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production
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 was
Nigeria
 with 213,000
liters
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litres
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 of
oil
,
then
 goes
Congo
 with 203,000
liters
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litres
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 and
Somalia
 and
Chad
 had equal production number
as
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of
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 50,000
liters
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litres
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, oil, congo, nigeria, liters, somalia, chad with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Production levels
  • Trends
  • Increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Stable
  • Peak production
  • Output
  • Significant changes
  • Yearly comparison
  • Global production
  • Correlations
  • Patterns
  • Volume of production
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