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The table below show daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below show daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented
table
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 data on
oil
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 manufacturing in four nations from 2000 to 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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in
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at
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begining
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beginning
 of
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table
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the table
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 among
of
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apply
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all countries in
Congo
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 was the biggest
productions
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production
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 of
oil
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,
however
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 in the end of
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table
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the table
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Nigeria
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 was
on
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in
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 first place
of
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in
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manufacture
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the manufacture
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 of
oil
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. In accordance with
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table
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 in 2000 the biggest
produstor
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production
producer
 of
oil
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 was
Congo
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 with 275,000
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liters
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litres
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 of
oil
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,
then
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 goes
Nigeria
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 with 205,000
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liters
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litres
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.
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, the penultimate place took
Somalia
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 with 5,000
liters
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 and the least
in
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this
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 year was
Chad
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 which did not
produced
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produce
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 any
oil
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.
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, in 2001 the places for
oil
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 production were the same, but
number
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a number
the number
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 of
producted
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produced
oil
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 changed in
Congo
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fallled
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apply
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to 234,000, in
Nigeria
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 reduced to 201,000, in
Somalia
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rised
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it rose
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 to 8,000 and in
Chad
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 was identical.
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, in 2003 were significant changes in number of production of
oil
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, but
places
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the places
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 were similar to previous, in
Congo
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 dramatically decreased to 215,000, in
Nigeria
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 was increased to 210,000, in
Somalia
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 was shot up to 21,000 and in
Chad
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 started producing
oil
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 and soar to 8,000.
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Nevertheless
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 in
2004
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2004,
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 there were
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 changes and in
first
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the first
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 place
of
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in
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producing
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production
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 was
Nigeria
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 with 213,000
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liters
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litres
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 of
oil
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,
then
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 goes
Congo
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 with 203,000
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liters
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litres
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 and
Somalia
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 and
Chad
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 had equal production number
as
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of
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 50,000
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liters
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litres
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, oil, congo, nigeria, liters, somalia, chad with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Production levels
  • Trends
  • Increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Stable
  • Peak production
  • Output
  • Significant changes
  • Yearly comparison
  • Global production
  • Correlations
  • Patterns
  • Volume of production
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