You have a problem with the computer at the office which has affected your work Write a letter to your manager and say What problem do you have What difficulties does this create for you What could be done about it.
Mrs. Umbridge,
I am writing to inform you that I recently had a problem with my laptop. I have been working as a software developer in the information technologies department of your company since 2020.
The device has been working slowly since July.
Also
, it freezes some days which even has bluescreen. Also
, some keys on the keyboard do not work properly such
as shift, t, and semicolon keys. Besides
, some keys are duplicating the letters while
I am coding.
Moreover
, these difficulties are affecting my performance and frustrating me. I must restart the computer when it is frozen. Furthermore
, when it displays a bluescreen, my work is lost. Therefore
, my performance has been affected as the errors have been increasing day by day.
I would be grateful if you could renew the computer. Thus
, I can give my best performance.
I look forward to your prompt response.
Yours sincerely,
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task achievement
Although your main points are clear, consider including a little more detail about how these issues specifically affect your daily tasks. This can improve your task response score.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by clearly organizing the description of the problems and their effects into separate paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are very polite and professional, contributing positively to the tone of the letter.
task achievement
The writing tone is perfectly suitable for a professional setting.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite