Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both side these views and give your own opinion.
Some people argue that environmental problems like the
loss
of of
plants and animal Remove the redundancy
apply
species
in
not Correct your spelling
is
a
major Correct article usage
apply
problem
and Fix the agreement mistake
problems
there
are other issues that need to be addressed first. Correct word choice
that there
Whereas
others show concern about this
and say that it's an equally important problem. Although
the extinction of the species
may not have a direct impact on human beings like poverty, famine has. I believe that it does have a long-term effect
on our food chain and indirectly affects us.
When a living organism gets extinct it usually doesn't affect us. Whereas
issues like poverty, unemployment and famine have an influence on our lifestyle and health. Therefore
they consider it to be a problem which is more important than the species
extinction. For example
, when a flower called zenous which was found in the Amazon jungle got
extinct, in 2018, it had no direct bad Verb problem
went
effect
on people as it was never used by them nor it
have any short-term Add a missing verb
did it
effect
. Hence
in such
cases, it's always seen that such
problems are neglected.
Where on the other hand
, some say that such
losses affect the food chain and in the long run can damage our biodiversity. When a species
is lost then
all the other creatures who were dependent on it are also
in danger leading to a reduction in their population . Moreover
, this
can lead to damage to our planet in future. For instance
, according to
a
article published in 'The Hindu', in 2020, Change the article
an
due to
heavy poaching of lions in the African jungle resulted into
extinction. Change preposition
in
Therefore
, the hunting of herbivores by these lions for food dropped, this
caused the population to increase drastically, which caused the Correct word choice
and this
loss
of grasslands due to
the heavy eating of grass, finally
after 10 years there was soil erosion occurring in that area. As a result
, I agree with the view that the loss
of flora and fauna should be treated as an important issue.
In conclusion, loss
of Correct article usage
the loss
species
may not have an
direct influence on human beings but it does have Change the article
a
an
Change the article
a
long term
Add a hyphen
long-term
effect
on Earth which indirectly affects us. Therefore
, such
issues must Add a missing verb
be adresssed
adresssed
by Correct your spelling
addressed
government
and tried to be solved as quickly as possible.Correct article usage
the government
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