The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen

and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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is
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the pie charts depicting the ages of Yeman and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. The age groups being studied in the pie charts are 0-14
years
, 15-59
years
and over 60
years
. It is particularly interesting to note that 15-59
years
in Yeman is projected to increase significantly from 2000 to 2050 by 11%
while
the age group of 0-14 will decline dramatically by 13%.
However
,
aged
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the aged
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population
will slightly increase by around 2% only. Regarding Italy's
population
,
0
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the 0
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-14
years
age group is projected to vary slightly by 3%. In the
mean
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while
, it is highlighted in the figure that 15-59
years
old will decrease
drasticially
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drastically
by around 15%
while
the
elderlies
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population
is projected to rise
skyhigh
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sky high
sky-high
by around 20%. To
summerize
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summarise
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, it is obvious that
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the aging
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aging
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ageing
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population
is happening in both developed and
under developed
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underdeveloped
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area
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.
This
trend will continue to make the
aging
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ageing
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population
a problem for the world as it increases the burden for youth and society.
Therefore
, it is highly recommended that the governments should set up a pension system and be prepared as early as possible to ease the facilities and medical problems brought
by
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the
aging
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ageing
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issue.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • young population
  • mature population
  • aging society
  • demographic shift
  • proportion
  • dominant
  • balanced distribution
  • projected increase
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