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Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people. Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your e-mail as follows: Dear…,

#bookshop #members #guest #speaker #event #series #talks #people #e-mail #addresses #dear…
Dear Mr. Lee, I hope you are well when you are receiving
this
 email. My name is Ahad, I live near to your bookshop. I have
been
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heard that you are planning to host a public event, and you are asking for recommendations about influencers to
invited
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.
However
, I would like to suggest inviting the wonderful American actress Viola Davis. She is
traveling
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 now, but she will be in
UK
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the UK
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 in June. Believe me, that will be the most crowded
successful
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 event in the world.
In addition
, Viola good speaker, very humble with people, generous with sharing her wisdom and of course her knowledge about how to
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 successful. When she was a kid, her life was difficult,
poor
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and faced bullying in school.
Therefore
, she will be the right person to invite. I
am study
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in
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 the local university here, and a lot of
student
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 talk about Viola. They want to meet her and ask about a lot of things,
such
 as how she became successful and
being
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healthy. But the most important,
how
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 she
is continue
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 her learning journey. Thank you for your time, and I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Ahad Saud.
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coherence cohesion
Clarify and organize the email with more distinct sections. This will help in enhancing readability and ensuring the recipient easily understands your points.
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Proofread and correct grammatical errors. Some sentences can be rephrased for clarity. For instance, 'I live near to your bookshop' should be 'I live near your bookshop.'
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Provide more specific examples or anecdotes about Viola Davis's achievements and how they align with the theme of the event.
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Good explanation of Viola Davis' background and why she would be an interesting speaker.
coherence cohesion
The email begins and ends with appropriate tones, making it polite and respectful.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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