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Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people. Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too

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Dear Mr. Lee, I hope you are well when you are receiving
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 email. My name is Ahad, I live near to your bookshop. I have heard that you are planning to host a public event, and you are asking for recommendations about influencers to invite.
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, I would like to suggest inviting the wonderful American actress Viola Davis. Viola Davis is not only an accomplished actress but
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 an inspiring speaker. Her humility, generosity, and wisdom make her an ideal guest for any public gathering. Having overcome significant challenges during her childhood, including poverty and bullying, Viola has a powerful story of resilience and success. I believe her insights on achieving success, maintaining well-being, and continuing the learning journey would deeply resonate with your audience, especially students from the local university, who are eager to meet her. Thank you for your time, and I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Ahad Saud.
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To further elevate the quality of your writing, consider expanding your explanation of Viola Davis's contributions with more specific examples of her speeches or public appearances. Additionally, making a clearer connection between her experiences and the interests of the audience might enhance your argument.
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Your letter is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The logical structure aids in the reader's understanding of your message.
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You have effectively addressed all parts of the task, providing a complete and relevant response with clear and comprehensive ideas.
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Mentioning Viola Davis's personal story and its resonance with the audience is a strong point that provides specific context and relevance.

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