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The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.

The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.
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The line graph illustrates the number of time spent on telephone calls in the
UK
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, divided into 3 categories from the
year
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 1995 to 2002. The figure is given in billions of minutes.
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, it is evident that the highest minutes of
UK
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 telephone usage
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contributed to local landlines in 1999.
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, Mobile phones contributed to the lowest point throughout the
year
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 1995.
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 with, it can be seen that the national and international calls in the United Kingdom exhibited an upward increase, similar to the trend of mobile communication. Non-local landline usage started at roughly 38
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 and
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 rocketed to 60 in the
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 2002.
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,
UK
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 nationals used mobile at approximately 3%, before surging to about 45 in 2002. Moving to the
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 category, it is witnessed that
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 people spent time on the fixed-line local call exceeded the others, which stood at above 70. It
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 soared to reach a peak of 90 in 1999, before slumping to the beginning number in the
last
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year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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