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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourist who visit such places?

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Nowadays, people do not have a lot of barriers
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 travelling and can visit almost any place in the
world
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. Because of
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, people are starting to choose spots where conditions are tough,
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 as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. Surely, there are some pluses and minuses of these trips which will be discussed in
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 essay. First of all,
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 amazing places, like the Sahara desert or
Antarctic
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the Antarctic
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,
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 shown in documentary films and watchers can not feel weather conditions or fully realize the beauty of the locations.
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, experiencing it helps widen individuals’ horizons.
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, when a person goes to the coldest spot in the
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 and in a year to a desert he or she can realize how various our
world
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 can be.
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, gaining new knowledge about our planet and finding out how things really work is
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 one of the benefits. Unfortunately, if you want to visit
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 unusual and picturesque places it will cost a lot. Spots which are difficult
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 rich tend not to have suitable accommodations or restaurants,
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 sometimes travellers have to take special gear and clothes. All these things increase a budget.
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, if you have decided to get to a jungle you need to get a vaccine and equipment to go through the rain forests.
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, when people travel to places they almost always bring their stuff with them which could damage the ecosystem of the wild place.
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, Everest is becoming a more and more popular destination but hundreds of tons of garbage are left behind by tourist groups.
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 there are advantages
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 as gaining experience and understanding of the
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 these tours might disrupt the ecosystem and
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expansive
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expensive
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example
Incorporate more specific examples to fully illustrate your points. For instance, mention well-documented cases of areas where tourism has had a positive or negative impact.
grammar
Pay attention to spelling and grammar errors. Terms like 'rich' should be corrected to 'reach,' and phrases like 'becoming a more and more popular destination' should be refined for clarity.
task response
Consider elaborating on the negative impact on ecosystems. Providing statistical data or real-life case studies could strengthen your arguments.
vocabulary
Aim for a more varied vocabulary to enhance readability and engagement. Phrases such as 'all these things increase a budget' can be substituted with 'These requirements significantly elevate the overall travel expenses.'
introduction
Your introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion, clearly stating the focus of the essay and what will be analyzed.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and restates the thesis, giving a clear sense of closure.
structure
Your essay is well-structured, with clear paragraphing that helps the reader follow your arguments easily.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • unique experiences
  • ecosystems
  • conservation efforts
  • economic benefits
  • environmental degradation
  • habitat destruction
  • safety risks
  • extreme weather conditions
  • navigation
  • high price tag
  • specialized equipment
  • influx
  • strain on local resources
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