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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of diferent employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should in 20 minutes for this task.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of diferent employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should in 20 minutes for this task.
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A glance at the given bar chart depicts the number of
hours
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 that different sexes with different
level
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levels
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 of employment spend
as
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on
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 free
time
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.
Overall
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, the men savour more
hours
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 in pastime in comparison with
women
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. Obviously,
un employed
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unemployed
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 and retired people have more leisure
time
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 than the other groups. Unemployed and retired men
hours
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 that
spend
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are spent
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 in pastime stand at about 80
hours
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 per week.
Hours
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 expenditure by the men and
women
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 that have
full
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full-time
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time
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 job is the lowest mere about 40
hours
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 per week. The
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women
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women's
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 expenditure in free
time
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follow
Correct subject-verb agreement
follows
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similar
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a similar
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 trend so the
women
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 who have
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part-time
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part
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part-time
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time
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job
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jobs
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 spend and stay in
house
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the house
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 for house working accounted for 40
hours
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 per week

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, time, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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