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Band 4.5

**You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged.** **Write a letter to your friend. In the letter:** - **apologise for the damage to the item** - **explain what happened** - **say how you are going to fix the issue**

#**you #friend #**write #**apologise #damage #item** #**explain #happened** #**say #issue**
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It,
s
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's
 been
such
 a long time since we
last
 met . How have you been ? I hope you are doing well . I,
m
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'm
 writing
this
 letter to apologise for the damage
of
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 the hard drive that I borrowed from you
last
 month. I am feeling very ashamed and felt bad for
my
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this
negligience
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negligence
 of mine . Yesterday evening, when I was free from my office work
as
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was
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 earlier than I expected. I have planned to watch
movie
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the movie
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 till midnight. Just before the interval of
movie
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the movie
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, Suddenly
electricity
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 voltage
drop
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dropped
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 down for a few
secods
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seconds
 and
then
electricity
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the electricity
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 was completely lost. After an hour, it came back . I tried to connect again but unfortunately,
hard
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the hard
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 drive failed to connect again and again .
Firstly
, I
think
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 that
its
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it
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 may be
due to
fault
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a fault
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 in connecting
cable
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the cable
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 but
i
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I
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 was wrong . Today morning, I was going to
technician
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a technician
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 for
repairement
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repair
. but
technician
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the technician
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 told me that
due to
short
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the short
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circut
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circuit
circuits
,
small
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a small
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 portion of
hard
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the hard
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 drive
were
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 completely lost. Now,
i
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I
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 have planned to buy
new
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a new
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 one on
coming
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the coming
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 weekend. I hope you understand my intentions . yours
truely
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truly
, x.y.z
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grammar vocabulary
Work on your punctuation and spelling. For instance, 'It's' instead of 'It,s' and 'I'm' instead of 'I,m', 'negligience' should be 'negligence'. Also, 'short circuirt, small portion... were damaged' instead of '...were completely lost.'
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph logically flows to the next. For instance, integrate your explanation with a transition phrase.
task response
You successfully covered all three bullet points: apology, explanation, and the solution.
task response
You maintained an appropriate tone throughout the letter, which is essential for formal communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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