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The given bar chart illustrates the median of times that students in five colleges study.

The given bar chart illustrates the median of times that students in five colleges study.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that students in
University
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 C tend to spend much more time studying during weekdays,
while
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 those in
University
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 A dominate the others at the weekends. The First Table chart
which
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apply
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shows
Weekdays
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Weekday
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studing
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studying
hours
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 in five universities.
University
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 C shows higher studying
hours
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 with 10.8.
Alsoaccording
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Also according
 to research Universities B and E have 10 and more learning
hours
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 10.2 and 10 , respectively. Meanwhile other two Universities lower than 10
hours
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session
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sessions
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University
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 and D (respectively 9.8 and 9.6). On
other
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the other
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 hand
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,
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University
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 A is
dominat
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predominantly
 studying
at
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on
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 weekend days
with
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for
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 9
hours
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 daily.
University
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 C shows
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an avarage
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avarage
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average
 result (7.8).
While
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University
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 D with lower rate again (5.6, formerly 9.6).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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